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You're crawling up slowly,
you're so crazy, got me wrapped
around bare bones and sweet divine
Caroline,
will you please be mine?

Summer time, sweet molasses,
look at those fine asses
Miss Caroline, won't you please.

Please, be mine?
Please, be mine...
Please...

Oh, Miss Caroline,
Oh, Miss Caroline.

There's a bay down by the garage,
shall we go, shall we follow
that lonely old man down
the shallow slopes?
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"And I go insane,
like I always do.
I call your name,
she's a lot like you.
She's a lot like you."

Go Insane, Lindsey Buckingham/Fleetwood Mac. They make some amazing music.

I feel like I can't write for crap anymore, so I'm pretty sure most of the stuff I've posted recently will go to the scrap bin cause I don't like any of it, I just have to post sometimes.

Took out the quote, and changed some ing's

took out
"
Pull apart my neurons,
insert your tags and make
your remarks.
Oh, Miss Caroline, won't you
please be mine?
I like the way the pain feels
in my brain, the way you
tinker and totter around in it."
and added a few please, be mine's.

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:iconcynicalxpoet:
I think this whole thing reads like lyrics... I like the rhythm it has to it.
:iconxshadoweddarknessx:
lovely :] seriously, i love all of this. it makes me smile...in a sadistic way it gives me joy. :D

the rhythm to it awsome

--
"friends of the devil but twice as mean"- Cry-Baby
:iconretrofires:
thanks. i was, and have been listening to a lot of fleetwood mac, especially go insane and...yeah...
i wish i was better at writing lyrics and that i could play some sort of a musical instrument. i'd love to make music.
:)

--
.I can't untangle what I feel and what would matter most.

And I'm not proud that nothing will seem easy about me.

Now there's just no point in reaching out for you..
:iconretrofires:
ah, i know. same here. usually, when i write, what i try to do is to find some words or phrases that try to convey the images i'm seeing, sometimes i have the words and the images go from that, but overall most of my stuff is like a mini-movie in my head.
and, i get a similar joy from the mini-movie...ah dear.

thanks. i'm pretty sure it's fm thing cause it's all i've been listening to at home so.....but. sometimes the only way to learn something is to emulate something you appreciate/enjoy. *Shrugs*

--
.I can't untangle what I feel and what would matter most.

And I'm not proud that nothing will seem easy about me.

Now there's just no point in reaching out for you..
:iconcynicalxpoet:
Well, there's always time to learn!
:iconexacerbate:
Yeah, I have to agree, this sounds like a song... and I like it! I can't choose which I like better, though- the first or the last...

--
how many times
must I tell you
whatever blossoms
is rooted in the dark.


-Ed Ochester, The Muse, Unreconstructed.
:iconretrofires:
I suppose there is, but this self-doubt thing I have going on kind of hampers my ability, cause I can't keep time, although now that I think of that, I don't know if that's learned or not but. I just..feel I have no musical talent, so..y'know. Self-defeating prophecy.

--
.I can't untangle what I feel and what would matter most.

And I'm not proud that nothing will seem easy about me.

Now there's just no point in reaching out for you..
:iconcynicalxpoet:
I still say it's worth a shot.
:iconretrofires:
I was constantly listening to Lindsey Buckingham's "Go Insane" and if it sounds like a song, totally cause of that.
I'm glad you like it, and I wish I was a better lyricist. :)

--
.I can't untangle what I feel and what would matter most.

And I'm not proud that nothing will seem easy about me.

Now there's just no point in reaching out for you..

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